The End

Odd, extremely to
A degree that he
Died in a bunker in
Barren Berlin.

A capsule. A sudden
Shock and
Darkness. Darkness.

Away. A man so
Minotaur-like and so
Subterranean. Lost and
Chasing balls of twine
Around broken corners that
Lead to rooms that lead
To rooms.

A sudden shock.
Darkness. A

Man, away. Turning
Off lights down
Dank corridors of…


Posted as part of Poets United Poetry Pantry

15 thoughts on “The End

  1. Sanaa Rizvi October 4, 2015 / 7:11 pm

    This has such an eerie and intense feel to it. Excellent write!!


  2. moondustwriter October 4, 2015 / 7:19 pm

    I love the feeling of being lost in the dark – chasing something in an other-world type maze. Thought provoking poem.


  3. Björn Rudberg (brudberg) October 4, 2015 / 7:20 pm

    Oh I think that once the Minotaur decided to off himself, there is hope.. I think I can name a few more bunkers where this should happen.


  4. ZQ October 4, 2015 / 8:36 pm

    Well… that was interesting and good. 🙂


  5. Sherry Blue Sky October 4, 2015 / 8:56 pm

    Wow! I really felt and saw this man, the turning, the sudden shock, and then him going down those “dank corridors of….Darkness.” Very effective writing.


  6. Susan October 4, 2015 / 9:18 pm

    A great imaginative analogy! I wonder how Jason felt descending … Anything like that Berlin monster Hitler’s exit into the labyrinth of death? He had no thread to resurrect him, nothing to keep him company. Only the sure feeling that his punishment would be harsher if he didn’t tend to it himself.


  7. kanzensakura October 5, 2015 / 1:05 am

    Interesting, intense and eerie work of an equally eerie, intense time in history.


  8. thotpurge October 5, 2015 / 2:24 am

    Around broken corners that Lead to rooms that lead To rooms – the maze of the broken mind.. great writing.


  9. Myrna October 5, 2015 / 4:56 pm

    This touched a place of fear in me. The darkness, the death, the after death. Good effective writing!


  10. glmeisner October 5, 2015 / 8:36 pm

    A very interesting look at what happens when a womanizing jerk gets jealous.


  11. Snakypoet (Rosemary Nissen-Wade) October 6, 2015 / 7:22 am

    It would help to know the context. (GL apparently does, but it’s not in the poem.)


    • Snakypoet (Rosemary Nissen-Wade) October 12, 2015 / 4:32 am

      Not that I don’t love it anyway. 🙂


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